Nestagy

[Nestagy]

Name: Nestagy
Age: 12
Race: Shifter (thinks she is human)
Height: 4' 7"
Weight: 90 lbs.
Physical Description: She is very short and scrawny as well a prepubescent. She has black hair that goes down to her waist as well as deep violet eyes.
When she shifts for her eyes don't change color. She can go from loud and obnoxious to quiet and observant in an instant.
Knows she's at a disadvantage height wise, whenever anyone calls her short she responds with "I just live in a big world."
Possessions: Her tunic, pants, and cape that she wears. A sun amulet, her mother's, that she wears on a chain around her neck. Two daggers that she wears in a sheath around her hip. An arbir spear that she keeps in her hide out somewhere in Marn.
Powers/strengths: She can shape shift into any animal that she has seen in the flesh. She is very quick and agile. She butcher animals and hunt when she is in one of her predatory animal forms. She somewhat fight with her knives, but not very well. Can be very sneaky and can blend into crowds. She can also steal without others noticing. Her best move is a head-butt.
Weaknesses: Not very strong. Has a strong aversion to wearing shoes. Dislikes fighting, but will seem like she is trying to pick a fight with her inability to filter whatever goes from her head to her mouth, as well as comes of nosy. Doesn't know how to do unarmed combat. She isn't consistent when it comes to changing forms, and when under a lot of unusual stress she can't change forms, or if already in an animal form, she will shift back.
History: She grew up in the woods outside of Marn with her adoptive parents, she doesn't know she's adopted. When she was seven her parents disappeared without a trace. She spent a little over a week waiting from their return but gave up hope of them ever returning. Figuring that she would need an easier way of getting food, she moved into the city of Marn. Having no money she decided to steal what she could, most of the time food, and occasionally things to sell for money, or even less, money. When she was ten exploring the woods, she accidently shifted into a wolf. From then on she practiced shifting to see what kind of animals she can change into, and to see if she could get her shifting consistent.

[Stella]

Hi there, welcome to Thar Shaddin.

I'd like to point you to Unicorn's Visions (don't be fooled by the name, it's a great forum). It's probably a little more suited to your style if you'd like to play this character as is.

If you want to try to get your character into play on this forum, I recommend you take a look at some of our approved characters. Here's one. Here's another one. People's first characters are usually not very powerful. Nestagy's ability to change into any animal she has seen before is overpowered. She's be able to change not only into a cat, dog, deer, mouse, or what have you, but also any insect she has ever encountered. The moment you place her in a situation where she encounters some magical beast, she'd be able to transform into that. Nearly all of our shifters have only one animal form, and some of them can't even control that shift. The really powerful ones might have two or three.

Your application has a lot of grammatical errors. Please proofread it and use full sentences. Your application is to showcase your writing ability.

You need to flesh out this character more. Right now, she is a skeleton of a character, who you probably made because you thought it would be cool to shift into animals. You need to think about how she is going to interact with other people. She's twelve. She has no family and no home. That's some heavy stuff.

Do some thinking and write more. Or, head off to Unicorn's Visions and come back in a few years.